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Wavedancer Project: commentary, part three
May. 3rd, 2009 11:46 amIntro/Index of all parts | Read without the commentary
Lucinda Jensen was there, and I cursed under my breath, as she was the biggest and most annoying gossip in town by far. She was also quasi-religious, and firmly convinced that Mike and I were living in sin, and, despite my attempts to explain the divided house that we shared, I couldn't seem to get her to understand that we were just friends. It aggravated the hell out of me, though Mike acted like he couldn't be bothered by it. Hopefully I could just grab a cart and sneak away without a pointed lecture on the sanctity of marriage, but I wasn't optimistic.
This is weird. And it's more of the Oppress the Poor Girl scenario, as well as Attack the Closed-Minded. Ugh. I wasn't very subtle, was I?
I mean, the paragraph isn't poorly written, but it's definitely poorly thought-out. I really didn't understand the Simple Rule of Side Characters, which is: they are separate entities from the background/plot/whatever else is going on, and they should be treated as thus. In other words, you spend tons of time looking through the eyes of your main characters, but don't forget the side characters. Just a few moments of being in their head could be enough to really make a fic sparkle. Seriously.
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Lucinda Jensen was there, and I cursed under my breath, as she was the biggest and most annoying gossip in town by far. She was also quasi-religious, and firmly convinced that Mike and I were living in sin, and, despite my attempts to explain the divided house that we shared, I couldn't seem to get her to understand that we were just friends. It aggravated the hell out of me, though Mike acted like he couldn't be bothered by it. Hopefully I could just grab a cart and sneak away without a pointed lecture on the sanctity of marriage, but I wasn't optimistic.
This is weird. And it's more of the Oppress the Poor Girl scenario, as well as Attack the Closed-Minded. Ugh. I wasn't very subtle, was I?
I mean, the paragraph isn't poorly written, but it's definitely poorly thought-out. I really didn't understand the Simple Rule of Side Characters, which is: they are separate entities from the background/plot/whatever else is going on, and they should be treated as thus. In other words, you spend tons of time looking through the eyes of your main characters, but don't forget the side characters. Just a few moments of being in their head could be enough to really make a fic sparkle. Seriously.
( Read more... )