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Recently someone on one of the lists I belong to mentioned that it's off-putting when a writer draws attention to an allusion or bit of foreshadowing they've made. It does seem to smack of "Look how clever I am!"; I can see doing a separately archived annotated work, if there is enough demand, but to point out the clever bits in the fic itself or even in the author's note seems distracting.

However, it started me thinking that, on the other hand, annotated versions are few and far between. Artists spend all of this extra time putting in clever touches, and so many of them go unnoticed. I thought it would be nice to have an entry where we show them off. I'd love to read about the thoughts behind the creation. I'd love to see what the artist created and hear what influenced the work or why they think it's particularly clever. (I'm not much of a fan of Formalism.)

Seeing that I have a wonderful flist, full of amazing fanfic writers, fanartists, and photographers, I thought that it would be fascinating to hear a few stories.

So here is a little exercise for the flist, if anyone is interested.

1) Find something you've created that you're rather proud of. Art, poetry, fic, whatever. This is the Ego Stroking thread...don't be afraid to add to it. I'm certain that you've created something that's rather clever...here's a chance to celebrate it!

2) Comment to this entry, or make your own entry, and either provide a link or a sample of your creation.

3) Explain why it's clever or why it was particularly difficult to create or why you love it so.

4) Mention anything else of note about it.

I'll be the guinea pig...I think what I'm most proud of in fandom is, quite surprisingly, one of the shortest things I've ever written. It took a while to really shape it in the exact manner I wanted. It was a response to the First Line Drabble competition that swept through LJ some time ago. I wrote a creepy little drabble on [livejournal.com profile] switchknife's LJ based on one of the first lines of one of her works. It's mature, of course, so don't say I didn't warn you. The first line I used was The body is his book.

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The body is his book. Lucius can always tell the lies it conceals, and this one should be no different, pale, sallow, spread out over the table like parchment. Black eyes like ink. He touches the warm flesh, lightly running his fingertips over one jutting hip. This body should have held no lies from him. This body should have known better. Its traitorous heart intrigues him.

He can control every last muscle, can do things with Imperius that even the Dark Lord might fear. It only takes the slightest effort to keep this body quiescent. He wonders where the treachery is written; the soles of the feet, the tender scalp, the delicate webbing between fingers.

This body is a mystery he will illuminate. He will have to sink deep to bring out the hidden letters, the dark morass of perfidy, the black word of betrayal that sprouted through the flesh.
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It was particularly difficult not to have Severus interact with Lucius, but I thought that would have spoiled it. I wanted to build up tension, to have the writer imagining him violently afraid under Lucius's fingertips. I love the clinical detachment that Lucius has affected; now that Severus has been found to be a traitor, Severus is nothing but an experiment to him, all human emotion divorced and withdrawn.

My favorite bit is "dark morass of perfidy"...so melodramatic, which you know I love. I kept that phrase in my head for weeks. I also love how the traitorous impulse is described as a plant, wending its way through Severus's body and bringing him to betrayal. I also love that Severus is described as parchment and ink in the second and third sentences, bringing in [livejournal.com profile] switchknife's first line, and then continuing the book comparison with "where treachery is written", "a mystery he will illuminate" (as in illuminated manuscripts), "the hidden letters", "the black word of betrayal". Oh, I had so much fun with this drabble, and I completely forgot about it until I thought of what I'd like to bring up for this entry.

Heh, the explanation is longer than the work. How amusing.

I am so hoping you'll respond...I think it will be really interesting. I am always amazed by the talent I see on the flist (and in the fandom/LJ in general), and I'd love to hear what you have to say!

EDIT: I fixed teh ebil bolding tag.

And another thing: You, flist, are cool. I knew it already, but still. Keep responding...have fun!

And three, long arsed or what?

Date: 2005-01-07 07:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zoepaleologa.livejournal.com
The other special bits I liked were that little phrase "well into cruelty's stride" and "many women have found me repellent, but not you". That's a heads up that this is not and never will be Alan Rickman.

Yes, it is bloody melodramatic, but I like it.

And I have to say, I am green with envy at the fragment you have posted above, it is bloody brilliant.

Re: And three, long arsed or what?

Date: 2005-01-08 02:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] valis2.livejournal.com
Oh, awesome! I'm so glad you responded. What a fascinating passage, too. Snape's venomous tongue, rising to the challenge of breaking a lover in two...wow!

When she died, part of me died – the only woman I ever loved was dead beyond recall –

Oh, twist the knife, why don't you...

"many women have found me repellent, but not you"

Oh, that is so very awesome. I really love that. I can imagine his amazement at finding someone who would be attracted to him. Very well done.

Melodramatic stuff, eh?

Ah, but I love melodrama (unless it gets into over-the-top territory).

And I have to say, I am green with envy at the fragment you have posted above, it is bloody brilliant.

I'm glad you read it, even with the accidental bolding. One switched letter in an HTML tag, and look what happens...*grins sheepishly*

Wow...what a compliment! And even more appreciated because you are you, a writer and someone who doesn't suffer fools silently. Thank you so very much!

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